My friend Georgie

By Georgina, 9

gorgeous and smart
exciting and has a big heart
outgoing and game for a laugh
really quiet in class and playing about
generous and good at art
independent and daring
ever so loving ever so caring!

martin is her last name
always is a helping hand
relaxed and laid back
taller than my other friends
is always chatting in class
naughty in class but good outside!
(April 2008)

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My two dalmations

By Georgie, 10

Ellie is the eldest of my two dalmations
Laid back
Loving and caring
Independent and daring
Ellie is the best!

Oliver is a cheeky devil
Lively and crazy
In and out of the house he is also lazy
Very naughty and likes his dinner
Even though he is the youngest
Really they are both the best!
(April 2008)

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Last night I saw the school...

By Lizzie, 10

Last night I saw the school sleeping,
Last night the pencils had a disco and messed up all the pots and the teacher blamed us the next day,
Last night I saw the caretaker doing the salsa with the mop,
and the forgotten instruments playing the best jazz and classical you have ever heard,
Last night I saw the teachers sleeping on the ceiling with black coal wings ,
Last night I saw the school sleeping safe and sound waiting for the day to come.
(April 2008)

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Last night at school

By George, 9

Last night I smelt the school in the canteen scoffing triple cheese burgers.
Last night I heard the janitor playing the guitar with the mop.
Last night I heard the head teacher snoring in the staffroom.
last night I felt the school giggling as cupboards split their sides.
(February 2008)

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My Charm Bracelet

By Ellie, 10

Polly, the sensible private glittery handbag.
Celia, the friendly happy glowing tiara.
Evie, the entertaining clowning horse hoe.
Jordan-Leigh, the loud centre of attention skirt.
Are friendship secrets and celebrated moments we shall keep forever.
(February 2008)

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Last night I saw a T-rex

By Luke, 11

Last night I saw a t-rex breathing as calmly like the sea swaying left and right. Last night I heard a t-rex smashing its tail on my front door and gritting its teeth angrily. Last night I felt a t-rex thumping its feet slowly but calmly. Last night I tasted fear on a triceratops as the t-rex kills it. (February 2008)

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Digger

By Gabe, 10

A young armadillo charging frantically through the quickly reforming earth sweating to create a salty dry smell, its hard back protecting itself from any stones that might murge in with the strong rough smelling soil that crumbles on to the stubby body frame as it charges through the soft ground. (February 2008)

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Last night at school

By Georgie, 10

Last night at school I saw the pens having a bath with soap in the sink.

Last night at school I saw the scissors boogying by the window.

Last night at school I saw the work folders sneeking out of the corridor.

Last night at school I saw the rulers doing the tango with the white boards.

Last night at school I saw the stick insects doing the side walk on the table.

Last night at school I saw the books reading themselves.

Last night at school I saw the tray tidys messing themselves up.
(February 2008)

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My family is a roast dinner

By Eric, 10

Dad, the yorkshire pudding, everyones favourite.
Mum, the vegetables, giving out a healthy mesage.
Gizmo, the roast beef, always the centre of etention.
The Nannas are the gravy, trickling into every nook and cranny.
The Grandads are the roast potatoes, old and crunch.
Me, the mustard giving out a BIG KAPOW!
(February 2008)

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My family is a decorators box

By Patrick, 9

My family is a decorators box. Holly the paint pot always messy. Kieran the wallpaper has to be silly. Mum the decorator bossy and doing all the work. Dad the step ladder just sits around. Me the wallpaper paste the sensible one but don't always help.
(February 2008)

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My family is the sea

By Rachel, 9

My Dad is a shark, fierce, clean and very tough.
My Mum is a Dolphin, kind, soft and caring.
My big brother is a Killer whale, clever,quiet and sophisticated.
I am a seahorse, wild, playful and funny.
My little brother is a turtle, tough on the outside and soft on the inside.
(February 2008)

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Last night at school

By Georgina, 9

Last night at school,I saw the pens and
pencils have a bath in the sink.
Last night at school,I saw the caretaker
doing the limbo with a mop and a broom.
Last night at school,I saw a bat flying
over my head and it was my teacher.
Last night at school,I saw books flying over
my head and flickering its pages at me.
(February 2008)

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My family is a football team

By James, 10

Mum the manager bossing everyone around
Dad the midfielder always doing sport
Nina the goalie always the lazy one
Me the striker non stop running.
(February 2008)

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My Family are animals

By Immy, 10

Dad, the teenage lion brave, mature but always ready to play.
Christy, my brother, the giraffe tall bold and never forgotten.
I am a sheep constantly moving around
My Mum is the sheepdog that takes me from place to place.
Lucy, my dog, the pig, out about always here, there and everywhere, scruffy wet and muddy.
My Family is a herd together in everything we do, completely unseparable.
(February 2008)

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The Car

By Joseph, 11

The rabbit running to its death.
Over above the prey with the gold metal paint
swooping and licking its chops.
It spots the creature and speeds up
the rabbit hops and hops cold and black.
The black wheels splats the rabbit to its death
(February 2008)

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Last night at school

By Adam, 10

Last night at school I saw the caretaker having a bath in the sink, washing himself with ice tea, then drying himself with P.E kits.

last night at school I heard the school eating a giant taco eating it with the doors then burping when he is finished.

last night at school I smelt the school burning itself having a cigerette then walking to jacksons to get some more!

last night at school I tasted the tea at school it smelt like cat wee and tasted like tomato juice.

last night at school I felt a deadly zombie gnawng me it chased me down the corridor but i tripped him up and he went to bits.
(February 2008)

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The Earthmover

By Chloe, 10

Killing, gnawing, Earthmover
Slashing the solid soil.
Ripping and shredding the coal to reveal,
a glint of gleaming gold.
The blade charging through the ground,
just like a boiling mad bull.
Chomping, gnashing, tearing the rough ground.
CRASH
The Earthmover stopped dancing, went to a standstill.

The work finished.
(February 2008)

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My Family is a Bunch of Flowers

By Millie, 11

Mum the Lilly bright and cheery ,
Dad the Rose, sharp but soft for me ,
Me the Foxglove bright and wild ,
Holly the Dog obviously the Tulip ,beautiful and elgant
Minkey the Cat good days bad days just like the Sunflower (February 2008)

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Ultimate Earthmover

By Calum, 10

The devastation of a black hole sucking up everything in its sight and spitting it back out again
The quake of a stampede and the sound of an avalanche
Tearing through the ground to get the black gold
(February 2008)

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My face

By Kez, 10

My face a rock crinkerly and wrinkerly diving swirling waiting for heaven to come.

My mouth a whirlpool furious but agile flushing down food.

My hair filled with hilarious hunched back head lice making henched nests.
(February 2008)

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The mirror

By Georgia, 10

I look in the mirror what do I see? A blue bird's feet grabbing its prey then letting go.
I look in the mirror what do I see? A cake hole with red icing.
I look in the mirror what do I see? A balloon being blown up.
(February 2008)

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My face

By Ross, 10

With eyes like pluto small as pin pricks
nose of the milky way a really odd shape
mouth black hole nothing stops in its way ( food )
ears saturn flying saucers
(February 2008)

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